today I'm gonna write something about Pinkification, how the girls get along with the wrong preconceptions, how some girls solve their problems and what is important for girl.
Pinkification, the main problem:
You go shopping. To your right you see the clothes of the boys: cars, blue, green, black and fire. To your left side you can see the stuff of the girls: pink, purple, princess and other "cute" clothes. If a girl went to a boys stuff, everybody would look at her and ask him-/herself, what wrong with that girl.Pinkification begins at baby size, the clothes for boy are blue and for girls they are pink.
WRONG PRECONCEPTIONS:
- Every girl is trying to be the well-clothiest. --- That's wrong, a girl should wear and do things they like. If a girl want be the well-clothiest, let her, don't blaspheme, that will make her angry with you and that isn't good for her self-esteem.
- Girls are perfect and they think that way. --- That's wrong, it seems to be so, but the most girls are self-critical. Nearly every of these self-critical girls think that they are ugly and they haven't got anything which is well-looking.
- Girls don't like anything that's not pink or purple. --- That's wrong, every girl is special and so their taste is diffrent. Ok., some girls like pink, but other girls like blue or green. Dark colour aren't only make for boys.
SOLVE PROBLEMS:
One girl, which I know, doesn't even care about pinkification. She thinks that everybody is special and no one can tell her what she should do and like. That also helps her self-esteem, if you look at her you will think at first that she's perfect because she don't care about her clothes. She only wear stuff which she likes and which are comfortable.Another girl, dissemble herself in school. In school, she's the perfect girl, everybody likes her and they all think that she's perfect. But at home she writes diary and she tell her diary everything because she isn't sure about that what her classmates said to her. At home she's very shy and afraid of doing something.
To be a girl means that you can do every thing what you like to do, don't care about what others say and try to do something new.
A fascinating blogpost - well done! Very well structured (I particularly like how you clearly point out what you are going to talk about in your introduction).
ReplyDeleteJust some small things regarding grammar & word choice:
- the stuff FOR girls
- if a girl went to the boys' aisle (or did you mean - if a girl worse the boys' stuff?)
- everybody would ask themselves what was wrong with her
- the clothes for boyS are blue and THOSE FOR GIRLS ARE PINK
- every girl is trying to be the MOST STYLISH (rather than well-clothiest)
- a girl should do things SHE likes (or girlS should do things THEY like)
- blaspheme is rather used in the context of God (making fun of religion etc.), in this context it would be better to say "don't make fun of her/don't mock her)
- from what I understand from the second paragraph, you wanted to say that girls are perfect BUT THEY DON'T THINK THAT WAY/DON'T BELIEVE IT. Most girls seem to be very self-conscious. A large number thinkgs that they are ugly and that they there isn't anything pretty about them.
- DIFFERENT
dark colourS aren't only MADE for boys
- ONE GIRL I KNOW
- she doesn't care about her clothes
- she only WEARS stuff she likes
- another girl pretends to be somebody else in school
- she writes A diary (or into her diary)
- she tellS her diary everything
- she thinks a lot about what her classmates said to her
- she is very shy and afraid of speaking up
- to be a girl means that you can do everything you want to do
ROXY PLEASE PAY MORE ATTENTION TO YOUR 3rd person S otherwise your text is thought-through, well developed and profoundly argues. Well done!